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I started from this entry. Your rather-constant (ie. more than once) usage of 'most favourite' was quite annoying, because if you really think about it, the word 'most' is redundant, since 'favourite' already suggests that your favourite [insert name of commodity] is the thing that you like the most. But I think I'm just being excessively anal here, so apart from that - good ice-breaker. I enjoyed reading about your childhood memories, although they are a little bit too brief. But then again, it's only an ice-breaker, so I guess the details aren't all that necessary.

I liked this entry, until I got to the second part. Truth be told, I don't quite get the purpose of incorporating the lines from Fight Club into the entry, but since it was a 2002 entry, I won't bitch too much about it. My favourite part of the entry is this bit:

"She's saying, 'What?'

Kill yourself.

She's saying, 'What?'

Try barbiturates and alcohol with your head inside a dry cleaning bag.

She says, 'What?'"

But since you put it in quotation marks, I'm assuming that you didn't write it. Was it from Chuck P.'s novel (I'm sorry, I still cannot spell his last name and I'm too lazy to grab my copy of "Diary" to check)? Fight Club? I so wanna read and watch Fight Club, but the world will end if I can get an uncensored copy of the film in Singapore.

Material things will be the end of me, I swear. (from here) You know, that's really true. Materialism will kill an aspiring artist. People should never be materialistic, but this is coming from a shopping-obsessed lunatic who loves money and clothes. Yep. Oh god dammit, I loved this entry. Very nicely disjointed; it effectively conveys your...well, disjointed thoughts. Brilliant entry, although you kinda lost me a little when it became more quotes than your own writing. I especially liked this bit: "I want to act. Forever. That's how it works. You go down forever. Thats what I want. Right?" The self-doubt at the end is so real. I hope your subsequent entries are like this too!

Well, it's not really. Your references to Fight Club in your earlier 2002 entries were completely lost on me, and as a result, I didn't completely get what you were saying. Also, your last paragraph of the entry, in which you justified your desire to own that celebrity bracelet thing: was it meant to be at least semi-satirical? If not, then...I have nothing to say.

Right. I typed the above about two months ago and today I suddenly remembered that this review is half-done, and since I'm not working today, I decided to continue with it. But lo and behold - you've moved! Bah. My laziness doesn't pay. I'm just going to review your newer entries, okay?

First entry of your new diary. Haha, I like the explanation you gave behind your username, which is rather quirky - both the username and the explanation, that is. I like it.

"Crying is a weak way to express my anger, and it's driving me crazy that it is the only way to manifest my emotions." (from here) Oh, I so know what you mean! I hate crying too but over the past few months, it was the first thing I turned to when I couldn't take whatever it was that I had to deal with. Sucks doesn't it? You take Arabic classes? That is so cool. It must be lots of fun.

"What would be any joy in being pregnant unless you actually were pregnant? I mean, yes her foot in my ribs HURTS, but her foot is in my ribs! Isn't that cool? Maybe you don't understand either." (from here) I probably don't, but still, kudos to you for taking responsibility. Having said that, I really liked what you wrote in italics that I quoted. It's a feeling which I probably wouldn't experience ever (since I'm dead set against getting married and having kids) but ironically, at the same time, it's also something that would perhaps make me re-consider. I don't know; when I read that, I got this strange, positive feeling, like there's so much more to life than just power, money and success. Oh well.

Okay, I've read all the entries in your new diary and a few from your old one. To be honest, I don't really know what to say, but I'll try all the same. Generally, I enjoyed reading you. You're honest and real, and also leading a life that I would never lead - which makes your diary quite a novelty. In addition, it helped majorly that you write like a properly educated, literate person, ie. proper grammar, spelling, punctuation, the works. You're also a pretty decent writer, in the sense that you obviously have a strong, secure grasp of English and that you know how to use it to your fullest advantage (am I beginning to sound like a teacher?). This is especially evident from the fact that I wasn't bored even when I was reading your daylog entries about going to the movies with your friends and things along those lines - something that surprised me, for I was ALWAYS bored to tears when I reviewed other diaries that contained a huge chunk of "Today I woke up, brushed my teeth, went to school, had lunch, hated my English teacher, came home, slept, good night"-esque entries. So, kudos to you once again.

On the downside, even though I enjoyed your diary for the most part, I still felt like there was something missing. To be honest, I preferred your older fight-club16 entries, for some weird reason; maybe because those entries that I reviewed were flawed but raw and edgy all at once, if that even makes sense. I mean, your diary is good, but it's not amazing. I expected more out of your entries about giving birth since it's such a supposedly pivotal moment in a young female's life, but even those entries were slightly lacking in the emotional department. Then again, perhaps I'm expecting too much; maybe I shouldn't expect an epiphany. I don't know, did it happen?

Still, I'd say that your diary is above average and it has the potential to be amazing. I think you just need some time before you hit your stride. And um...yeah, that's about it, I guess. Good luck with your college applications and everything else. I'll be coming back to check how you're doing once in a while.

Layout

You designed it and I like it. It's classy in its simplicity, pretty in its plainness (is that a word? I'm too lazy to get my dictionary). On first glance, the blue/purple colour combination seemed a bit odd, but after a while, it started to grow on me. It's very pretty and aesthetically-pleasing; good job done.

My only complaint is the SCROLLBAR. I think the default IE scrollbar kind of took away from the layout. Maybe it's a personal prejudice of mine since I love coloured scrollbars, but I think such a pretty layout deserves a nice scrollbar too. Oh well, it's up to you, of course. It still looks good the way it is now.

Another thing: some of your links (eg. your reviews link) took me to the error diaryland page. You might wanna fix that.

All in all, I enjoyed you. Rock on.

Rating: 3.5/5

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